Review your draft for pacing and sentence variety. Choose one sentence to revise either the pacing or sentence structure. In the space provided, list your original sentence, the revision, and an explanation of why you chose to revise that sentence. (Please put exact answer from Edmentum or Plato)
Narrative:
Rochelle sipped on her third mug of French roast with a twist of hazelnut as she waited for Marigold. She remembered that Marigold was always on time. So where was she? Rochelle picked up the yearbook that she had brought with her. Marigold, a girl with flaming red hair and large hazel eyes, was standing next to her in the photo. Even then, Marigold was a bit of a mystery to Rochelle.

Rochelle was lost in thought when someone tapped her on her shoulder. She was surprised to find that the hand belonged to a police officer. He asked her if she knew Marigold. When Rochelle said yes, he handed her a package wrapped in paper. Rochelle was confused and scared. Was something wrong with her friend? "Is she okay? I just spoke to her," Rochelle whispered.

"I’m her brother," said the officer. That’s when Rochelle noticed the same hazel eyes. "She sent something special for you."

"But where is Marigold?" cried Rochelle. The man calmed her and asked her to open the package. Rochelle unwrapped it. Inside was an envelope containing an airplane ticket to Barcelona and a note.

Rochelle didn’t know what to do. The officer smiled, turned around, and left. Rochelle read Marigold’s note and smiled. Rochelle remembered the day both of them had planned to go to Spain. The girl with the hazel eyes was making that dream come true.

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Answer 1

Answer:

Here's my help. :)

Explanation:

Original sentence: She was surprised to find that the hand belonged to a police officer.

Revision: She was shocked to find that the cold hand had belonged to a tall police officer dressed in black, gray, and blue.

Why I chose this one: I chose this one because it didn't have enough detail in it.

Answer 2
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Related Questions

Determine the subject of the sentence below.

Vanessa and Chantel are walking their dogs.

their dogs
Vanessa
Chantel
Vanessa and Chantel

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Answer:

vanessa and chantel is the subject

Explanation:

vanessa and chantel (subject) are walking their dogs (verb)

vanessa and chantel

because they are the ones doing the action.

What does Bill convince Sam to do concerning the ransom request?

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Answer: The wolves refer to the kidnappers, Bill and Sam, and the lamb refers to Johnny who has been kidnapped?

Explanation:

the answer is what the other person said

explaination- i would type it all out, but since it’s all already there and the person got it right there is no need.

Choose the word in the following sentence that functions as an adjective.

The Birthday present was a dollhouse

1. Dollhouse
2.Brithday
3.Present
4.was

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Birthday because if you wouldn’t use it it could be for any occasion in my opinion.
Birthday, because it is is describing the present/what the present is for.

define tense with 2 example.

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Explanation:

Tense is the form of a verb that shows when something happened, is happening or is going to happen.[1] There are three main tenses:

Present tense: things that are true when the words are spoken or written.

Example: She goes to school. In this sentence, goes shows that it is a present tense. It suggests that she regularly goes to school.

Example: She is going to school. This says she is now going to school.

Past tense: things that were true before the words were spoken or written.

Example: She went to school. In this sentence, went shows that it is a past tense.

Future tense: things that will be true after the words are spoken or written.

Example: She will go to school. In this sentence, will shows that it is a future tense.

Tense can be shown by changing the spelling of a verb. For example, be can become am, is, and are in present tense, and was and were in past tense. In English, future tense is shown by adding will before the verb. For example, be becomes will be in future tense.

Answer:

The word tense defines time. Basically, anything that we do at a particular time is called a tense.

For Eg,

She went to Christopher's party.

I will do my homework this evening.

Explanation:

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Read Section 1 and 2 of Article 1 of the California Constitution. Then, in a brief paragraph, explain the way that these first two sections are organized. Be sure to clearly summarize the points of each section, and explain if there are any subsections. Be sure that you use transitions clearly so that the reader will understand the organization of the contents of these sections of Article 1. Your answer should also contain correct spelling, punctuation, and grammar.

Here is a list of transitions that may be helpful:
first, second, third, next, beyond, furthermore, following, then, further, after, before, in the end, iIn conclusion, in addition, additionally

Heres the link for the article: https://dw6y82u65ww8h.cloudfront.net/organisations/328/c773025a-61b3-471d-af28-4e69ff66e72e/caconstitutionart1.pdf

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Then, in a brief paragraph, explain the way that these first two sections are organized. Be sure to clearly summarize the points of each section, and explain if there are any subsections. Be sure that you use transitions clearly so that the reader will understand the organization of the contents of these sections.

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Today, you will be investigating the teacher. Your first task is to observe the suspect (your teacher) and the scene (the classroom).
What evidence do you notice and what does it say about your teacher?
Use the handout to record your evidence, then analyze each piece of evidence to see what it reveals about the suspect.
Finally, summarize your conclusions.
** Your goal is to describe your teacher, and the classroom, as thoroughly as possible (consider things like personality, style, attitude, hobbies, etc)


i chose Most Likely To Awards sooo what do i dooooooo

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this is more of an assignment that you have to do bv we dont know your teacher or what classroom looks like. soooo

Just listen and look closely

Which choice best describes the following sentence?

Cassidy volunteered.

It is a complete and correct sentence.
It is a fragment that is missing a subject.
It is a fragment that is missing a predicate.
It is a fragment with a subject and verb but expresses an incomplete thought

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Answer:

Complete and correct sentence

Explanation:

A, it is a complete and correct sentence

list and briefly explain all the amendments that have to do with presidency

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PRESIDENTIAL AMENDMENTS

12TH Amendment- Set in place where both president and vice president are voted on independently in the electoral vote. Previously each elector cast two votes for President, the one with the most votes was the president and the person with the second most votes was vice president. Today each set is informally voted together by parties. Proposed 12-9-1803 ratified 6-15-1804.

20th Amendment- Changed the day the president took office, moved it up so we wouldn’t have a “lame duck” presidency for an extended time. It also put in place a process to replace the president if he died before he took office. Proposed 3-2-1932 ratified 1-23-1933.

22nd Amendment- Stipulated that no president may serve more than two elected terms. The maximum a person can serve is two and just under half terms. Franklin Roosevelt was actually elected to four terms before this amendment took place. Proposed 3-24-1947 ratified 2-27-1951.

25th Amendment- Cleared up Article 2 of the constitution by stipulating the process of the Vice-president taking office. Also provided the process on how Vice-presidents can be selected if they die or are removed during the term. Proposed 7-6-1965 ratified 2-10-1967.
The 13th, 14th, and 15th Amendments, known collectively as the Civil War Amendments, were designed to ensure equality for recently emancipated slaves.


The 15th Amendment prohibited governments from denying U.S. citizens the right to vote based on race, color, or past servitude.
The 25th Amendment, ratified by the states on February 10, 1967, basically deals with the order of presidential succession and what happens if or when a president is unable to fulfill the duties of the office.

Look at this outline of the second speech.

House is priceless piece of history
Town already has places for teen activities
Schools offer programs for students
Community center has other activities
Important to preserve town's history
No substitute for real thing
Can see how people used to live
Which of these best describes how the outline helps the reader understand the speech?
Answer choices for the above question

It reveals that the town has enough malls.

It lists reasons to support keeping the house.

It lists places that teens can go to be together.

It reveals the important history of the old house.

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It lists reasons to support keeping the house.

The question is in the picture.

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your answer would be letter A :)
i believe it’s letter A

Do you love reading if so what is your favorite book to read and who is your favorite character or main character?

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Answer:

yes! i like reading cuz when I read it seems like I'm in that book , that story I'm reading... Is like an adventure inside my imagination. My favorite book is "The Greatest Secret of the world" by

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I like reading it takes my mind off everything and lose track of time

Question 3(Multiple Choice Worth 5 points)
(LC)

Read the paragraph. Then answer the question that follows.

Perhaps you wanted pizza for dinner, but were out voted by the rest of the family who wanted chili. This is similar to what happens in a community. One person has to give up a right for the good of the group. Sometimes citizens' duties and rights conflict with each other. A good example is a public protest. People have the right to meet in groups and share ideas. However, a protest can disrupt traffic or other normal activities. A city must provide extra police protection to keep people safe. Therefore, the city has the right to require permission in advance for a protest. Government must make laws to balance the rights of individuals and different groups of people.

What type of connection is used in the paragraph?

Simile
Contrast
Category
Analogy

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Answer:

guess its category

Explanation:

i got a similar question i answered ths ..not sure whether its write r wrong

I think it’s analogy. The definition of analogy is the comparison between two things. The analogy is the sentence about chili.

A _is a conversation between two or more characters in a story

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Answer:

dialogue

Explanation:

this is a dialogue. When two people are talking, the conversation between them is called a dialogue.

A Dialogues is a convention between two or more characters in a story

What theme (message or lesson) does one of us is lying offer to teens about the importance of being true to who they really are, even if their parents disagree?

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The main theme in One of Us is lying are the effects of marginalization, the desire for power and lies versus truth.
It shows them it’s okay to be who you are

List some examples of passive leisure.

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Answer:

Watching TV, going to the movies, listening to music, sunbathing, or any other activity that requires almost no mental or physical effort is an example of passive leisure.

Answer:

Watching TV, going to the movies, listening to music, sunbathing,

Explanation:

 any other activity that requires almost no mental or physical effort is an example of passive leisure.

vivian is a civil engineer working on a new bridge for the city what might be a task that vivian performs as part of her job

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Answer:

designing and maintaining the bridge structure

Explanation:

designing and maintaining bridge structure

Question is down below part 3

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Answer:

Indifference

Explanation:

A, indifference









Indifference

I need a essay for a basketball card her is the screen shot.About the book Crossover.I choose Crystal bell,pls do an essay on her.using the pic below

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Answer:

http://www.essaytyper.com/

Explanation:

i hope im not to late just type in basketball and type random letters

Go here to find the essay I hope it’s good

the reef by marcella morris

Setting

Protagonist

Rising Action

Conflict

Climax

Falling Action

Resolution


Please hurry!

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resolution
the reef : by Nadia Moran
you have to worked really hard to get it done.
falling action
the falling action i think would be when the scientists clapped for her after she gave her presentation.
climax
author: Marcella Morris
the climax in the story was when it said"....the biological solution was in her hands".
rising action
the rising action was when it said ".... the something shift inside her".
protagonists
Sophie and Sam
setting
science lab
aunt's house
new york
Conflict is the problem between people or family members

what is a word that has more than one deffinition?

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Answer:

Homonyms, or multiple-meaning words, are words that have the same spelling and usually sound alike, but have different meanings (e.g. dog bark, tree bark). ... Word study including homonym practice games and multiple meaning word activities and lists continues as students progress and their vocabularies increase.Explanation:

A word that has more than one definition is called a homonym.

Which option describes dialect?(5 point)


A. language that follows strict rules for grammar, spelling, and punctuation language that follows strict rules for grammar, spelling, and punctuation


B.language that is used in a particular region or by a particular group


C. language that is used in a particular region or by a particular group language that is specific to a type of job or activity


D. the language that is specific to a type of job or activity language that breaks from the rules of grammar, spelling, and punctuation

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Answer:

The answer is B

The correct answer should be B

How do you think prejudice affects people who are being prejudged and people who are prejudging?

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Answer:

Prejudice is a prejudgment based on inadequate knowledge. Prejudice often relies on stereotypes. For instance, a person meeting a female child for the first time might assume she likes princesses or the color pink. Prejudice can be conscious or unconscious. A person doesn’t have to realize they’re being prejudiced to prejudge others.

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Explanation:

Prejudice is a complex problem that has led to wars, enslavement, abuse, murder, and untold suffering. Working with a therapist can help people overcome their prejudices, understand the effects of prejudice on people they love, and develop strategies for dealing with the mental health effects of living in a world filled with prejudice

Although bias might be unintentional, it can have a domino effect. After all, prejudice was responsible for the Holocaust, slavery, and the Trail of Tears. Even in a smaller scale, it's everywhere in our life, and you might not even notice it. Exposure to discrimination is a key risk factor for poor mental health among individuals who are prejudiced. And prejudiced people are unable to make diverse connections and live in "their own bubble" of the world.

Which option best supports an idea in a discussion?(1 point)
arguments
opinions
evidence
interpretation

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Answer:

opinions

Explanation:

opinions can help because where are arguments there are fights

Answer——-- 2.opinions

Explain what rambling means
make a sentence with it

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Answer:

Rambling typically means to make incoherent speech, usually as a fact such as jumping topics at random points with no relations or similarities between the topics.

"The professor rambled on about his life experiences, but what has that got to do with our Algebra class? "

Another form of rambling is when it is used to describe a person wandering about. Usually, it can be used to describe when one goes on a walk or stroll with no direct purpose, or destination to get too.

"My father and I would go on a ramble in the western outback, but with no clear intentions. His eagle-eyes pierced the country-side, as if he was searching for the unknown; But what was the meaning behind his long-tirade walks and disoriented behaviors? "

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I sit at my desk listening to thunder growl outside my window. Flashes of light burst through the darkness, and wind races past my window. The thrilling combination of sight and sound conjures up visions of dragons roaring proudly, breathing fire, and soaring across the midnight sky. Dragons first fascinated me when I was a little girl. They have followed me ever since. The magnificent creatures appeared in storybooks I read in the library, paintings I saw in museums, movies I watched in the theater, and the dreams I had in my sleep. By the time I was thirteen, one question consumed me. I wanted to know if dragons ever existed, so I set out on a quest for facts.


2


As I started my research, I discovered many skeptics. Scientists presented evidence to show why dragons could not—and did not—exist. They explained that it would be impossible for dragons to fly because they would be too big. They laughed at the idea of dragons breathing fire. They pointed out that no other animal has ever done this. They said that if dragons had lived, someone would have found remains somewhere in the world. No bones about it, there were plenty of logical explanations. It would have been easy for me to accept that the only place dragons ever existed was in the imaginations of those who believed.


3


I could have given up, but I thought about my grandmother. She always told me that "people who believe that science is the answer to everything are missing out on everything else." With her words in mind, I searched some more. There were many facts that hinted that dragons may not be fictional. I noticed that cultures across the world all described dragons in similar ways. This was odd because they had no way to communicate with each other. I found dragons mentioned in more than just stories. They appeared in old legal papers, in the travel logs of Marco Polo, and in the Bible. I saw that the Chinese calendar uses a different animal each year. Dragons are included along with eleven real animals. I began to believe it was a real possibility that all of these people were talking about a creature that actually existed.


4


With renewed hope that there was some truth to the legends, I looked for new research. I found that some experts disagreed with popular arguments against dragons. They suggested that a dragon could have four stomachs like a cow. If it created stomach gases like birds, it might create enough to lift itself off the ground. This would give it the ability to fly. If it forced out air when diving toward the earth, it might release gases which could ignite into flame. When the animal died, the stomachs would release strong acids that would dissolve its dead body over time. Biologists backed up these ideas with sketches and models based on known animals. Not everyone agreed with these ideas, but many of the things we accept about dinosaurs and other extinct species started the same way.


5


I doubt we will ever truly know whether dragons existed. There may always be two sides to the fiery debate. Some will say the stories come from active imaginations. Some will believe with all their hearts that the legendary creatures roamed our ancient world. I don't know for certain which side to believe, but the sound and fury of a night like this makes me smile. It rekindles my childhood dreams and keeps the exciting possibility alive.



Which best states the main idea of the text?


(A) I have found no proof that dragons ever existed.


(B) I have found some proof that dragons may have existed.


(C) I have always wondered if dragons existed, and I hope they did.


(D) I have not been able to decide if dragons ever existed or not.

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I have found no proof that dragons ever existed

did anyone do the 9th Grade Summer Reading for Miami senior high

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Um no I’m
Not from m’aimai so

Identify the sentence that includes an indefinite pronoun.
A. The graduating students threw themselves a party.
B. Everyone enjoyed the celebration.
C. The principal herself attended and had a great time.

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Explanation:

Everyone enjoyed the celebration

where everyone is indefinite pronoun.

Answer:

B. Everyone enjoyed the celebration

Explanation:

Everyone is an indefinite pronoun because it does not refer to anything, or person or amount in particular

List all the states the Mississippi river runs through

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Answer:

There is so much to consider along this great American waterway as it courses through 10 states—Minnesota, Wisconsin, Iowa, Illinois, Missouri, Kentucky, Tennessee, Arkansas, Mississippi, and Louisiana—it would seem easy to overlook a few pieces.

Explanation:

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Minnesota, Wisconsin, Iowa, Illinois, Missouri, Kentucky, Tennessee, Arkansas, Mississippi, and Louisiana

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why did Bronwyn feel the need to hide her secret

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Answer:

because she needs to get into Yale?

Explanation:

classify the differences of household clothes and going out clothes

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Answer:

going out clothes is the clothes that you wear when you want want to feel special somewhere special

Answer:

Household clothes are the clothes that you wear at home like pyjamas but going out clothes are clothes that you wear when you are going out somewhere you dont just wear household clothes when you are going somewhere like a birthday party

Explanation:

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